Personal Monster Academic Essay

The descriptions are very good and I like how much information there is but can you structure it like an academic essay? You have enough information to make a concrete thesis. There’s no clear thesis in the introduction or the conclusion. There should be 3 body paragraphs representing 3 theories of the monster’s origins with evidence to support the claims. You took out the outside sources, but can you describe the monster in your own perspective? And connect it’s relations to the theories of the other authors?

Here are the different theories you can use if you don’t know them:

Mary Shelly: creates her monster by her connections to death, her trip to Geneva, and her anxieties about recent events.

King: we are mentally ill and need the psychic relief. He states 4 reasons why we watch horror movies; to prove that we can, to re-establish a feeling of normality, to enjoy other’s suffering, and to experience immoral emotions.

del Toro and Hogan: vampires are the romantic hero and the undead monster. We want to be like them, having eternal youth and sexiness.

Klosterman: zombies are simple, but they represent modern life and its problems that keep on coming. There’s a fear of contagian, becoming mindless.

Brothers: Godzilla originates from the aftermath of Hiroshima and Nagasaki. It’s an incarnation of radiation, dealing with disaster in isolation (Japan had no allies) and a feeling of helplessness, and serving as a warning for future generation (grappling with anxiety about future nuclear attacks).

Loughrey: slender has vague and contradicting details like its appearance and victims. It’s relatable: creepy woods near your neighborhood, the young audience can believe in the monster. There are folktale traditions told- woods as dangerous, kidnapped children incidents.

Hello, I like where you’re going with this academic essay, but I feel like this essay doesn’t follow the guidelines my professor gave to me. There are also sources I don’t recognize. You don’t need to have exactly 6 sources, less of fine. Can you make more connections to the sources and support your claims for the origins of the monster? Maybe describe the monster in your own image that gives you fear instead of from that outside source. And should be a 5 paragraph essay that includes introduction, 3 body paragraphs, and conclusion. Two body paragraphs are ok if it’s long enough. Thank you for writing anyway.